The phone rang at 4am.
Sharp and unnatural. Punctuating sleep.
Again?
Last time, she answered and I watched her pause, then fold like an empty coat on the cold tiles, encased in grief.
The phone rang. And rang.
Sharp and unnatural. Punctuating sleep.
Again?
Last time, she answered and I watched her pause, then fold like an empty coat on the cold tiles, encased in grief.
The phone rang. And rang.
Very good.
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ReplyDeleteI love the imagery - folding "like an empty coat on the cold tiles" is great!
ReplyDeleteNot "Again." but "Again?" I love this.
ReplyDeleteHer inability to answer because of what happened last time? Understandable. This is great.
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Anguish. Suspense. Let us hope it was just a wrong number.
ReplyDeleteWe would be terribly wrong, would we not?
I'm also going with the "folding like an empty coat on the cold tiles" as my favorite line. Perfect image of grief.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the others -- "fold like an empty coat" is a great.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. I really appreciate the feedback. When I was young, I watched a family friend take some terrible news over the phone, and this is how I imagined her.
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