Friday, February 24, 2012

Secrets by Jackie Simpson


“I’ll push this piece of gum right down here, Betty. Nobody will ever be able to tell that we dropped it.”
“The label covering the nasty dent on the forehead was inspired, Sam.”

10 comments:

  1. Excellent. I'm laughing. And I really dig the sarcasm in the last line.

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  2. the last line makes it all work. Great delivery.

    congrats on last week.

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  3. Loved loved loved this! I struggled with that little piece of paper on the forehead. I chose to ignore it.

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  4. Oops! Med students screw up. Strike one for future careers.

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  5. A couple students accidentally breaking the very expensive piece of school property. Love it!

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  6. Love the idea. I'm sure it happens!

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  7. There were so many cues one could stem from in this picture. I love yours!

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  8. You know what? Your response here somehow feels shorter than the others. It doesn't give us years of a story, like some did, or tons of emotion, like others did. What it does give us is extremely clever dialogue in a very short space. The word "inspired" here is beyond perfect. This is really tight, good writing. I hope you'll come back again on Monday.

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  9. Thank you to everyone for kind comments. This was a short and cowardly debut, and a surprise to come second in such a talented bunch.

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