"It's still a magical and special time", her Dad attempted.
The words held cold comfort. A sleigh with bells would not pass in front of the moon tonight. A sleigh with bells had never passed in front of the moon. It was a paradigm shift too far in her ten year old world. She felt sulphur on the roof of her mouth, a slight ringing in her ears and the ground beneath her feet unsteady as the snow banks.
The words held cold comfort. A sleigh with bells would not pass in front of the moon tonight. A sleigh with bells had never passed in front of the moon. It was a paradigm shift too far in her ten year old world. She felt sulphur on the roof of her mouth, a slight ringing in her ears and the ground beneath her feet unsteady as the snow banks.
I liked this. You took this in a neat and unexpected direction.
ReplyDeleteThank you for participating in this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. I really enjoyed reading this. The idea of a ten-year-old child experiencing the loss of that magical belief is certainly interesting. I love your use of the word--gritty next to the "sulphur." Nicely done. I hope you'll come back again next week.
ReplyDeleteThanks very much. I enjoyed reading this week's submissions and the way the festive season marked some of the pieces. It's always cool to get feedback comments, cheers!
ReplyDeletethat was lovely
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